The Dangers Of Reality TV
According to the article "The Dangers Of Reality TV" its stated that in general life reality television spreading illogical informations that are harmful for young fans. However, reality television still following the ancient thoughts, that is, competition is the only way of success in a capitalist economy. Also, reality television sends the message that image is more important rather than ability. On the other hand, it is also telling us that, education is completely unnecessary to fulfill the American dreams. Finally, reality tv shows aren't replicating the society but also it is showing the whole world wrong messages.
Now a days reality television plays harmful role in our general life. It is also spreading several valueless messages that are destroying the minds of its young fans. However, it is sends out the harmful information which is related to the importance of competition, the value of image over ability, the absolescence of education and so on. it is believed by creators of reality television that, competition is the only key to success in capitalist economy.But the creators of the reality tv don't care about the young generation rather than fulfilling their own needs.
Firstly, reality tv show is the only show that encourage the idea that, life is nothing but a competition. However, many business truly depends on competition. There is no such bussiness in America that doesn't want to become monopoly serving the needs of consumers. Because of that almost every industry in the United States losing economy due to mergers and acquisitions.
Secondly, reality television also shows that it is the only way to get success rather than ability. In reality show most contestant who is also qualified often loses to another who presents a better image. For example, singer of any singing reality shows who has a better voice but less attractive looks than other singer can't survive further. So, as we can see image is more important than substance.
Thirdly, the most dangerous message of the reality show is they belief, education is less important or completely unnecessary in order to fulfill the American dreams.They also believes, people who graduates from college can't make more money rather than chosing reality shows. There is no benefit in going to the school and face the difficulties of learning when there is a better option to get on reality shows such as fear factor, eating bugs and walk away with a bucket of money. But truth is these is the path of getting money only, not the path of learning true education.
Finally, reality shows can shows us a package of entertainment. It can't gives us true education. Also, it is not the procedure of repliciting society. It is the procedure of destroying young generation. We should be more aware of not getting fooled by them.
Hello I am a student in Dr. X’s class and was asked to give you feedback on your revision of CAT 1.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all,
I think your claim and thesis was clear but the reasons to support your claim were the same reasons the author used in the article. You have to come up with your own reason in order to prove your claim.
I think your claim and thesis was somewhat confusing because you are explaining how reality tv is harmful, but then you mention that it is teaching us about competition. You should try and stick to your main point.
Next,
One of your reasons connects to the topic well and is easy to understand. One reason I liked was “reality tv show is the only show that encourage the idea that, life is nothing but a competition.”
Your reasons are off topic. For example, you stated that reality tv shows is the only show that encourage the idea that, life is nothing but a competition , and you gave no examples of how reality tv encourages this idea or any reference to your life.
Your reasons are a copy of the authors. You need to have your own original reasons.
Also,
You have copied ideas from the reading and forgot to put them in quotation marks. For example, “there is no such business in America that doesn't want to become monopoly serving the needs of consumers. Because of that almost every industry in the United States losing economy due to mergers and acquisitions.”
Your evidence does not connect to the claim or thesis because there was no evidence. Your evidence was taken from the author.
Lastly I would like you to know that the whole was a bit hard to read because you failed to come up with your own reasons and evidence to support your claim.
Hello. I am a student in Dr. X’s class and I was asked to give you a feedback on your revision of CAT 1.
ReplyDeleteFirst of all I think your claim/thesis is very clear because I could understand it and I like how you start.
Next, your reasons connect to the topic well and are easy to understand. One reason I liked was “It is also spreading several valueless messages that are destroying the minds of its young fans.” Your reasons are good, but you are copying them from the author. You need to have your own original reasons. Even though what you say was really good.
Also, I could not understand your evidence. Lastly I would like you to know that the whole was a bit hard to read because you did get related to the topic but there wasn’t enough claims/thesis. But I really like it you are doing well just try to do much better next time.